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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi, Dan!

I couldn't stop laughing all the way through reading this. Right from the disclaimer at the beginning of the story until the last sentence; you've got such a funny piece of writing here, and it's really great.

First of all, it fit brilliantly with the theme of travel, Neville and Luna trotting the globe to look for all these different creatures and take a well deserved holiday after the battle. I have a soft spot for them as a couple, and it's always interesting to see what stories people come up with for the same theme!

The idea of Neville being drunk in a bar in America is actually hilarious, possibly because he becomes quite a serious character towards the end of the series. I've never imagined him drunk before, but I thought the way you portrayed him here was great - he keeps coming out with things he knows he shouldn't be saying, but at the same time he's still Neville.

One of the aspects I loved in this story were the contrasts you drew between Neville and Rick and the differences between British and American cultures. It really added to the comedy, especially when Rick was struggling to understand what Neville was saying despite the common language, and just the little details like the way we drink our tea.

Then, as if the English slang that Neville was using wasn't difficult enough for Rick to understand, the poor guy has to listen to a crazy drunk Brit ordering strange things ("some girly drink called buttered beer" - brilliant!) and telling him impossible and sincere stories about magic as though it actually exists! I really felt sorry for him, and his bewilderment was quite visible - I'm pretty sure if someone started telling me about pulling a magic sword from a talking hat, and flying on broomsticks at school, I'd nod and smile and then get away as quickly as I possibly could. I loved the way Neville knew that he shouldn't be telling Rick all of this, but he was either so drunk or driven to a point where he didn't really care what he said. Or maybe he was just being deliberately mischievous and trying to see what the guy's reaction would be...

I thought your characterisation of Luna was great as well. The way she's so calm about finding Neville after he's run away from her, putting it down to Nargles, and then dealing with the Muggles that Neville has been over-friendly with - it fits well with the character we see in the books, so serene all the time, even in the heat of battle.

The whole story was just so vivid! I could picture every single thing you mentioned really easily, especially when Neville jumps off his stool to try and hide from Luna. I can't think of enough synonyms for 'funny' and 'hilarious' to do this justice, but I really loved reading it!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hi, Sian!

I'm really glad that you got a good laugh out of it. Aside from 5 points, I felt like that was the most that I could hope for. At least I got the Travel angle pretty well covered. I never feel good about one of these deals where you only have a couple of days to try to get an idea to fit in with a theme. All that said, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.

I also have a really soft spot for the Neville-Luna pairing, although I could see why it wouldn't work out in the long run. Poor Neville seems to have gotten the worst of the deal here, though.

Rich was an easy character for me to write. I just thought "what would my uncles say or do in this situation." With that in mind, Rick's thoughts and dialog pretty much wrote themselves. He is a huge contrast to Neville. And he can't make heads or tails of most of what Neville's trying to tell him. I got a kick out of imagining Neville's gleeful, drunken rebellion against the Statue of Secrecy. He's such a rebel on the inside, it just doesn't come out all that often.

Ah, Luna. I felt a little weird about what I did with her character in this. Not the part where she was being completely nonplussed and matter-of-fact when she was talking to and eventually obliviating Rick, but rather all of the things that she and Neville were up to while they were traveling. The thing is, I actually *can* imagine her being that way. It's just biology to her, after all. Still, it feels weird.

Ah, this was such a sweet review! You really made me feel loads better about this story. Thanks for all the kind things you said and taking the time to say them!

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