Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Amanda! Iím finally back for the last posted chapter and this is so exciting finally being caught up!

The opening part of this chapter was really great! I assume that the task given to Remus is some sort of initiation thing for the Order. I really liked how youíve begun to incorporate other characters into the story such as Diggle as it gives me variety and thatís the spice of life so itís all good!

The challenges were really cool! I liked the imagination you put into them, because you obviously wanted to show that each skill was going to be tested which is something I would imagine that the Order would do. I think my favourite one was the potion one because it really was fun to read see the analytical thoughts behind his decision and figure it out with him.

The party section of this chapter was really great! I enjoyed the dynamics of all the members and it definitely was worth the hype the other characters had given it. I really loved Celestine in this section because with what happens later on in the chapter it does make me wonder whatís going to happen to her. Sheís sort of on the outskirts not being as studious which is evident with her preference for Witch Weekly, and I have a feeling something monumental may happen to her. I may be wrong, as itís just a gut instinct but it will be interesting to see.

The section where Lily was thinking back to Snape was really sweet! I never thought of them planning their future together and knowing what happens to them makes it even more tragic. The end of their friendship is such a defining moment of the series it really makes me wonder what would have happened if they had remained friends and whether they would have got that shop or not.

The idea of Snape being a mentor for Regulus is oddly touching. Him teaching Regulus levicorpus is nerving because Iím currently dreading who Regulusí victims may be. If I thought that was a little worrying, I was no way near prepared enough for the next part! I had been wondering when Peter would begin to integrate himself among the Death Eaters and I really loved how you did it, because you could clearly see he was doing it for greed, nothing more or less. Iím not sure whether thatís good or not but I suppose it is more preferable than revenge.

What he did to Celestine wasnít nice at all. Though I knew that her and Sirius probably wouldnít last too long and they would end up breaking up soon, what Peter was plain cruel. He could see that he was crushing her and her dreams, but also damaging his friendís reputation with it, which does make me question the whole greed v. revenge question.

That was a wonderful chapter, Amanda! I can now say, I canít wait for the next :D

Author's Response: Yay, you're caught up! My externship has been exhausting me over the past couple of weeks and I haven't been able to finish the next chapter yet. Hopefully it'll be up very soon.

It's so great that you liked the Order trials! I worried that I was making it too easy or that the tasks wouldn't seem relevant enough to actual duties of OOTP members, but at least it was entertaining, which makes me happy.

Celestine is a little on the fringes here, but I tried to emphasize that she's not a total ditz by including her in Lily's N.E.W.T. study group. After all, this is the same girl who devised a multi-step plan to win Sirius's heart just a few chapters back. She's got a brain :)

I love that you can picture adult Lily and Severus working together in an AU scenario. It's sad to think about all that they lost out on because of one selfish mistake on his part.

I've said this before, I'm sure, but I really like the idea of a Severus/Regulus friendship, even if it's not a mentoring type of relationship like it is here. I think they have a lot in common and it would be interesting to see what they could teach one another. It's definitely a permanent part of my head canon.

Peter! Oh, it's so great that you like the turn I've taken with him. I searched for a long time for a realistic way to explain his defection to the Death Eaters and I hope that the transition I've introduced seems sensible. A lot of people seem to portray him as a bumbling fool and I wanted to suggest in this story that he's got darker, more complex traits lurking under the surface, things that are easy to hide when you're the quiet one. I love how much you analyzed his character here :)

Thanks for the brilliant review!


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 385
Submit Report: