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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
Yay! I adore Rolf/Luna ( well, really just anything with Luna).
Characterizing Luna is probably one of the hardest things out there for a HPFF writer, so I salute you for taking her on. usually, I see Luna as being over-done as far as quirkiness goes, but you didn't do that at all. It seems realistic to me that as she grows older, Luna would mature a bit, and maybe tone down the eccentricities. I think you might be able to add a little more quirkiness to her character though, if you were so inclined. Maybe an aside about obscure dragon mythology, or perhaps odd protective clothing.

You mentioned that you might continue this story (which I think is a fantastic idea), so maybe a few more oddities could emerge in chapters to come. I do like her little remark here, it seems very Luna: 'Sounds like the sort to have a good singing voice, she observed'.

I absolutely loved the passage from the book (nice nod to canon with the titles :) and your Charlie was wonderful. (I actually included him in my own House Cup entry, he's probably my favourite Weasley).

I love how you made Luna an intelligent character. It drives me mad when people portray her as quirky and ditzy- no, she's a Ravenclaw, she's inquisitive and intelligent, so thank you for showing that!

I also like all the little details in here- dragon names, the eggs, capers with a side of dragon trainers and the like. Your writing flows really well, it was a really enjoyable story and I think it would do well as a multi-chap.
I hope you write more, as I'd love to read it!
~Gilly (from DumbledoresArmyOfOne's Review thread)

Author's Response: Ugh, she was so hard to write, and I agree that I needed to find a few more places to insert some quirks in order to really get her down. I'm happy to hear that you felt like her characterization made sense given her maturity and that you noticed my few subtle attempts at quirk, like the comment about Rolf seeming the type to be a decent singer.

I do think the story is asking to be continued and perhaps that will allow me more opportunities to get into the nitty gritty of Luna's character. It's great that you also feel like more chapters would be beneficial :)

Yeah, I tend to pull from canon a lot, particularly in my writing over the past year. I prefer to use canon characters and ideas, so that's obviously where the books came from. I'm glad you liked my Charlie and the book passage--that was all mine and it was so fun.

I have trouble imagining Luna as being ditzy, and I agree that it's silly to conclude that quirkiness and intelligence can't coexist. Hopefully I made Ravenclaw proud with this story :)

Thanks for your very lovely review!

-Amanda


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