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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
I liked this chapter even if it was filler. Fillers are always my favorite because we get to see more of the characters in their environment without the plot getting in the way. I mean I love your plot so far, too, but I'm one of those readers that pay closer attention to characters than plots. After all, the characters often are the ones driving the plot.

I also like how interconnected you've bridged the characters together without them knowing it yet. I'm assuming Mia's interview is with Oliver's sister. That's an excellent way to ensure that Oliver's and Mia's lives intertwine with one another. I can't wait to see more interaction between the pair of them. And Aidan is adorable. Anyway, another great chapter, Jami! Keep up the amazing writing! The only critique I have is to make sure you proofread more carefully because I noticed quite a few typos in this chapter (whereas the previous chapter I didn't notice any, or if I did they weren't as noticeable). Also, some words were clearly supposed to be other words. I also noticed that you used 'then' when you should have used 'than' somewhere. A tip in remembering when to use each is that 'then' is used when talking time (something following something else in chronological order); and 'than' is used when comparing/contrasting two things in a sentence. Other than that, I have no other feedback. I'm still interested in this story to keep reading and I hope you update soon. (:

Author's Response: Hi again!! I'm one of those people that thinks there can pretty much never be a filler unless it's just a character sitting there in silence, because -- like you said -- character drive chapters are the best times to get to know them better. Especially in a story like this where it will be mainly character driven.

Hmmm you might be right about Mia's interview being with his sister Claire ;). maybe! Aidan is probably my favorite part about this. Well, that and the fact that it's just him and Mia. Single mom's, who are interested in really giving their children a solid base, tend to have such a special relationship with them.

Ugh I'm the typo queen. I always think I caught them all, but then they just stay hidden in there :P. Then/than usually happens when my brain is going faster than my fingers (we/be happens a lot that way as well, and i have on idea why!) I'll do another read through and see if I can comb out the rest of the errors! Thanks for pointing them out! I'm *think* I'll be posting the next chapter by Sunday :)!

Thank you so much for another awesome review, and I'm so excited that you're enjoying these characters so far! I'm on pretty shaky ground in this era, so your feedback has been absolutely awesome to receive!

♥ Jami

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