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Review:broadwaykat says:
I seriously love this. It is brilliant and cute and by far the best send up of Harry Potter Slash Twilight I have ever heard. I think it's adorable - a great idea for a parody and it had me laughing several times. Particularly in the last bits - with cute little throwaway lines about what happened to the Potter's and the Hermione/Draco phenomenon and all that stuff. It had me giggling and was totally adorable.

My only suggestion would be to watch some of your sentences and phrasings. While they were never enough to take you out of the story I found one or two moments where a sentence would sound a little turned around, or perhaps the wrong tense of a word would be used. But we're all guilty of that from time to time - so it can hardly be blamed.

I think my favorite part would be that you didn't use oc to make up the 'Bella' character. As vampiric as everyone always compared Lucius too, for some reason I never looked to Narcissa as being the Bella counterpart, and it gave me a good laugh when, halfway through the story I realized that's who she was sort-of standing in for.

Author's Response: Hi! So first of all thank you so much for being the first reviewer on this story, and for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful one. It really made my day and was so exciting to receive!

I'm really glad you liked the story as I had no idea what other people would think of it. I pretty much tied in every ridiculous idea I could think of, and the Twilight storyline just had to be included. It's great that the Narcissa-Bella comparison surprised you: I really wanted to make it work while being a little silly and unbelievable.

Ah, I am definitely guilty of run-on sentences and being a little wordy. Thank you for your feedback, and I'll definitely re-visit it soon! :)

I'm also pleased you liked the little details, about Dramiones (again, another parody necessity!). I quite enjoyed tying in the almost-relevant details, and I'm so pleased you appreciated them. :P Thank you so much for this review! :D


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