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Review:Gaiapet says:
Oh, Freddie. Youíre killing me. I feel so bad for him. Like just through this whole chapter I feel so much sympathy and pity. Especially since a lot of it sounds like he is having panic attacks. Like, I canít even really talk about this. Would it suffice to say that pretty much every emotion he goes through dealing with the break up, I feel at the same time? Making me feel the same pain, confusion, regret, and just anything. How do you write emotions so well that it makes me feel them? It was like vicariously living a breakup. Not pleasant.



I also just want to shake Fred, tell him that he is amazing and that I love him and that things get better and to just stop blaming himself for everything. But I guess Iíll have to leave most of that to Ryan, Gee, and co.



NEVER BRING A PERSONíS MOTHER INTO ANYTHING UNLESS YOU WANT TO DIE! NOT COOL ZONKO!



Okay, so this whole chapter I just keep saying ďOh no, my poor baby! Be happy! Why canít good things happen to you?Ē I mean I know this is a more serious story, but something good needs to happen to my poor baby!



ďYouíre going to catch the flu and then throw soup at me when it isnít hot enough.Ē

-Look at you, youíve figured out how things work!



I love that Ryan works at The Hogís Head for fun. At least I hope it is for fun and not because her parents are making her support herself and the baby. Iím sticking with she is a cool cat and likes to work the seedy bar for fun.



Look at Ryan being nice. Maternal even?



I like it when Ryan grins devilishly.



Fred is so sweet and such a gentleman to her! I love how he doesnít really even think about it. Itís just how he was raised. He is naturally a good guy. YOU HEAR THAT, FRED, YOU ARE ONE OF THE GOOD GUYS!



FRAMES!



I like how Ryan is so confused by everything Freddie does. She just doesnít understand him. And he doesnít understand her. I sense character development and growth of mutual understanding in our future.



Go Gee!



HOW CAN ANYTHING GO WORSE THAN IT IS NOW? YOU ARE ALREADY KILLING ME WITH FEELINGS! I CANíT TAKE SOMETHING ACTUALLY BAD HAPPENING! IF IT IS A DEATH, MISCARRIAGE, MAJOR INJURY, BANKRUPTCY, OR SOMETHING ELSE ACTUALLY HORRIBLE YOU WILL ACTUALLY KILL ME!

Author's Response: Aww I'm sorry I made you feel all the feels! Well, to be clear I'm not actually sorry. I was sort of aiming for that, but it sort of makes me sound like a TV show director laughing maniacally. Which I am not.

I have no idea why the emotions write so easily. I think it's because I'm so invested in my characters... well, few in particular that are going through so much, but also have so much. It's important for Freddie to know that even though things are hard, he has so much and will continue to have so much to be thankful for.

Yeah Fred is just like his dad, but let's be real he's a momma's boy too.

The next chapter definitely has some cool ups and downs I really enjoyed writing. Fred is going to struggle through a lot, but he's definitely going to grow because of it. And also have a lot of fun along the way.

I like when Ryan has a mood swing and is nice for 30 seconds. It suits her.

I love that about Fred too. Like James is back and forth about being good versus just caring about himself. But Freddie, the way he was raised, will always do the right thing... even if it seems wrong. He's just that guy. He's like a Peeta-figure in the story.

You sense correctly. Just wait a couple chapters and you'll see why Ryan is so confused by Fred's good-guy-ness.

Uhhh. It gets better?

Thank you, my favorite bartender.


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