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Review:MC_HK says:
This chapter was too funny! Again, the witty banter and the awkward thoughts that Lorcan had to himself were hilarious! Your imagery and use of adjectives was spot on.

I'm sorry this is so short, but I don't find too much wrong with this chapter. My only suggestion is try not to use parentheses too much. For me, at least, it kind of messes up the flow of the story. There are many ideas you can creatively convey without having to use them. Also, I'd like to know what happened to him in that trunk! Maybe add in a little bit of him telling Lysander what he had to endure.

I'm sorry if you expected something more, but I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter! It was a good length and kept me giggling all the way through. Looking forward to reading more :) MC_HK

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for your review! I'm sorry it took me so long to respond. :)

I'm very glad that you thought that my chapter was funny. Humor tends to be a weak spot for me, because nobody gets my jokes! :P

I will definitely try to edit out some of those parentheses! They ARE a bit bothersome, and the only reason that I use them is that I get into these parenthetical moods... I guess I'm strange. I also need to qualify the trunk part a bit better--I never actually meant for Lorcan to get into the trunk. I could've done a lot better job of showing that, couldn't I? I'm sorry for the confusion. :)

Hey, any review is a good review, in my opinion! Thanks for your thoughts. I'll definitely re-request for the last chapter!

~UnluckyStar57


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