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Review:GinnyPotterForever says:
First off, a very well written story. It fits right in with the rest of your fics, and I love that.

Nice one with Harry and the cloak situation, made me laugh:-)
You make Peter a good character until you write from his point of view - which is brilliant, since no one was supposed to doubt him. It's confusing at times - once or twice I asked myself whether Peter had already turned to the Dark side at this point, then I remember from White Flags that he turned a long time ago. It doesn't make sense why Peter would walk alone at night until he tells us himself that he has no one to be afraid of.

The fight in the second chapter was good:-) most convincing I've read in a while.

You even manage small details like Sirius not being there for Harry's birthday and Bathilda Bagshot:-) your attention to detail is magnificent.

You must think I'm stalking you - please don't;-) it's just keeping a casual eye on you while trying not to be overly obvious about it.

Awesome stuff!!

Author's Response: Thank you! :D I thought it was a good way to fill in some of the space between Trainee and the last chapter of White Flags. :) And it was also a good way to set Innocent up some more - with a bit of Marlene, and to give Sirius and Dumbledore a bit more history, and some Order in there too. :)
Haha, I enjoyed that part. :) Harry's so fun to write. :)
I actually found Peter's chapter so interesting; by this point, he's been spying for nearly four years, and he's quite an accomplished liar, so no one but Peter really knows what's going on. :S Yes, I really enjoyed showing Peter as not afraid to go out alone, or answer the door, and liked that Sirius saw it as bravery. :S
Thank you! Believe it or not, it was't supposed to have been a fight; I'd intended to end it when they were leaving Remus'... I'm so glad I wrote it, though. :P
Yes - I love details, and as a result, I generally cram lots into obscure places in the stories I write. :) I also get so excited when people like yourself notice them! :D
No, not at all! Observe all you want - I love your reviews! :D
Thank you!
MarauderLover7.


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