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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello hello! marauderfan here with your requested review.

I really enjoyed reading this! You adhered to the non-romance theme very well. I particularly liked the bit about Rose and Scorpius's passionate disagreement about Chocolate Frog cards, haha.

Poor Lorcan! That girl he was competing with sounds downright scary. (I loved the rumours about her, by the way!) And I appreciate the fact that she's a Gryffindor, it's nice to see a Gryffindor antagonist for once.

I have to say I don't know much about Freudian psychology, which only made Lysander seem crazier! I love the way you've characterised him. He's a lot like Luna, only instead of being really into weird magical creatures, it's psychology. And he doesn't care what people think of him. Basically I think you did wonderfully with him.

You've got a really nice story flow, peppered with little humourous comments (the building up of the Gobstones game as something deadly... Oh and the oil spill reference. I LOL-ed at that one.)

Based on the title, I'm gathering that psychology is quite important to the story, and if you want to flesh out the characters a bit more (well, just Lysander) I think you could add why he's so into psychology in the first place. It's not really necessary to add, since this is primarily a humour piece, but if you wanted to I think it would add depth to the character and make him more understandable.

Otherwise, lovely job on this! And feel free to re-request.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for being so prompt with your review, and the lovely comments you've given me! :)

Yes, I really wanted to take a stab at Scorose--I actually don't mind them as a pairing, but there are so many stories about them in a hate-turns-to-love relationship. I just wanted their relationship in this story to be a brief mention of hate-remaining-hate. :)

I'm so glad you loved the rumors! That was my attempt at being very silly, and to kind of explain why she's in Gryffindor. Really, she's kind of bold and brash, and not very cunning. That's kind of the Gryffindor bad side, and she has it full-on. I just wanted to give her something that would set her apart from most antagonists, and to me, making her a Gryffindor really does make her an odd duck.

I'm so sorry that I didn't explain the terms fully enough! This story was written at a time when I was reviewing a LOT for a psych final, and I kind of word-vomited psychology terms without giving a definition. When I edit, I'll have to add some qualifiers so that people can kind of get a grasp of what's going on!

The oil spill reference? Well, in much the same way that I was word-vomiting psychology, I was also studying for my environmental science final! That's just kind of a passing mention, but I thought it was a little bit humorous. I'm so glad you caught it!

I could always add things to my story!! I have this really bad habit of making my characters exist only in the words that I write them in, but there is much more to be said on some aspects! Lysander does need to reveal more of his character and his background, as do the rest of the gang. I will definitely be working on that! :)

Thank you so very much! This review was really lovely!


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