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Review:MC_HK says:
Hello there :)

I wouldn't say this was badly written. It has a lot of potential and what is there is actually well written. For me, I feel like one-shots need to put in a little more detail just because of the whole one chapter thing and with such an intense event like this, I want some answers! I want to know what exactly her relationship with James is, considering you mention that he talks to her and really likes talking to her, but she seems to think she isn't important to him. I really want to know why the girls ridicule her. Is she nerdy? Is she ugly? Again, this is just the kinds of things I like to know. I know you say her father hates her for "killing" her mother, but could you give me a bit more detail here? What does he do that makes her think that? What does he say?

Otherwise, this is pretty well written, and I don't have too many problems with it :) Feel free to re-request whenever :) MC_H

Author's Response: Hi!

I definitely see what you're talking about - I could definitely add in a lot more detail to certain situations! This was very much a story that I wrote in one sitting, so I may go back and add details now that you've mentioned it!

Thanks so much for reviewing!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

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