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Review:lovethepotters says:
After receiving your lovely review, I thought I'd have a look at some of your stuff, starting with this piece. I'm so glad I did as well - it's a wonderfully-engaging Rose/Scorpius one-shot :)

I think you've done a very good job in establishing both Scorpius' and Rose's characters as quickly as you did. They're both hilariously funny and witty, which makes me so happy they got together in the end!

I also liked the fact that both of them were placed in Ravenclaw. It makes the possibility of a relationship between them much more likely than if Rose was in Gryffindor and Scorpius was in Slytherin. I wonder how Ron and Draco would have reacted though, maybe (if you go back to editing this someday) you could include their reactions on their children being in Ravenclaw? Just an idea though :)

I just have one major point of CC (sorry for pointing it out, I'm just trying to help your story to flow better!) Some of your phrases are a bit clumsy and difficult to understand. For example:

"One fall to the ground and they all spill out"

"I stare and the strips lying on the ground."

If you manage to fix up the ambiguity, the story will flow much better :)

All in all, thanks for the great read! Sorry if I've bored you with all my thoughts. Keep up the good work :)

Author's Response: EEE! :D A review from you!
I remember your work. And I really love it. I'm beyond happy that you have something to say about mine!

that' my main challenge when it comes to one-shots. You don't have the liberty of taking a couple of chapters just to set things up and establish everything. You just have to dive right in! I'm glad you liked my characterization and style :) And the fact that you did find it funny and witty is great! It's what I was aiming for :)

And yes, I was going for something different... And putting them both in Ravenclaw was both different and realistic, in my opinion.

And don't worry about it :P You were the one who told me to never be sorry for CCs and I do follow that. they are incredibly helpful :)

So, someday, when I get the time, I'll edit this. I'll fix the random fragments and make things clearer for the reader. Maybe I'll add in Ron's and Draco's reactions too. Let's see :)

Thanks for this wonderful review! Looking forward to hearing from you more often :)



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