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Review:academica says:
Hello! I'm here for Review Tag, and also incidentally to leave my 1,000th review! How exciting! :)

Wow, what an action-packed first chapter! I actually thought this was a one-shot when I first looked at it and so I'm kind of relieved that it's a work-in-progress because now maybe I can follow it and see where you take it from here.

I like your characterization of Alice a lot. I feel like she and Frank aren't written often and I don't know her very well, but I liked the portrayal of her as a mother and a warrior, of sorts, in this chapter. She really seems, at least at first glance, like the rock and center of the Longbottom family. She's clearly still vulnerable, though, which is a nice balance.

Frank I feel like I don't know as well so far. It seemed like you were suggesting trouble in paradise in the beginning, but I'm still wondering about it because it wasn't really returned to later on in this chapter due to everything that happened. Perhaps that will come up again when the matter of Lily and James's murder is slightly more settled.

I will say that in everything I've read so far it seems like the Longbottom tragedy happened prior to the Potter murders or was treated as entirely separate (i.e., like they didn't know each other well). I actually love this spin on it where Alice and Frank are directly involved in the investigation.

Oh, and the call board! That's an awesome idea and I like how you clearly thought it through.

Anyway, excellent start! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Yea for me being your 1000th review!! (I actually imagined balloons and confetti falling when I read this! LOL!)

The first part of the chapter was supposed to just portray just how scared Alice is whenever Frank goes off to work. Knowing the dangers that he could face and the whole not knowing what was happening kind of thing. I sort of likened it to what a wife feels when she sends her husband off to war, not knowing if or when she would see him again.

I have always thought of the Longbottom's fate as a result of the Death Eaters being angry at the fall of Voldemort and looking for reasons for what happened. I think this is part of what makes it so tragic is that everyone thought the war was over when this happened.

Glad you liked it so far...I will have the exciting conclusion up shortly!! :)


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