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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Oooh, I really liked the change in point of view! I've never really read anything from Severus's point of view, at least not as a teenager, so this was definitely fun to read!

I think you got his personality spot on. I loved that he seemed a little lurky and anti-social without seeming completely creepy and unlikeable. And the you wrote his jealousy over James and Lily was just perfect. It is very clear how much he hates Sirius and James! It was also cool to see a little of his opinions of Beth so far, and I enjoyed reading about their encounter. They are still complete strangers, really, and don't know anything about each other! I can't wait to see how that changes!

Snape's conversation with his friends was also well-written - he is definitely a very moody teenage, isn't he? I dislike his friends a lot already, which I guess is a good thing! Rosier, in particular, seems like he could be particularly nicely!

There were a few lines that I enjoyed that I now feel the need to quote, so sorry about that:

“Then I’d suggest you leave before you disturb anyone else’s studies,” she said. He glanced around at the empty library and looked back at the librarian in slight disbelief, but chose not to argue.' I think that might've been my perfect - classically amazing!

'He hated thinking like that – it made him sound like an antisocial freak' - I don't know why I liked this line so much. It just made me laugh!

Anyway, apologies for this thoroughly weird unhelpful review, just want to say that this was another awesome chapter! (By the way, be prepared for me to say that every time I review a chapter.)

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Before this, the only novel I'd ever written was all in one point of view, and now I can't see how that ever happened. :D This story worked loads better from different points of view, and I came to love Snape even more through exploring his mind in chapters like this one! I'm glad you liked how I wrote him, too; I tried to keep him as canonically accurate as possible, even through giving him so many AU situations, the greatest of which is obviously Beth's presence in his life. He definitely isn't a flawless person; there are many aspects about him that aren't very likable, and I thought it was important to write those in addition to the more worthy traits he has. At this point, he and Beth are definitely still strangers, and I wanted to make his getting over Lily pretty gradual, so it would be more realistic, and would also make his attentions toward Beth more realistic as well.

Moody teenager -- and how! His friends are all basically awful. :P They come up in later chapters, and more in the second book (and even the third, a bit), and have quite a profound influence over him even though he isn't fond of a lot of things about them.

You're really great at pointing out quotes I forgot I wrote, and just love rereading, so thanks for that! ♥ Ah, Madam Pince. The two novels I've done set in Hogwarts, she's cropped up, and I just love writing her.

Oh my goodness, don't even think about apologizing for any review you ever leave me! I'm just so glad you're enjoying the story; this whole trilogy is something I'm immensely proud of, and reactions like yours are indescribably appreciated. Thank you so much!! ♥


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