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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Rachel!

Ever since I started reading this story, I thought the Marauders would make good detectives and it was proved to be true again with the opening scene when theyíre locked up in their dorm and asking questions. The slight argument between James and Sirius really added to the tense and chilling nature of the story, though I canít say how successful their plan is going to be, because it almost sounds too simple!

Bahaha! Remus is slightly scared of Lily? Thatís brilliant! I never would have thought that and now I just want more interaction between the two to see what happens! He really does have a different side with his internal sarcasm from time to time and it really added to the scene. I do feel bad for Lily thinking that theyíre going to be in danger when theyíre most likely fine if they have the cloak.

McGonagall, why did you let them out? The killerís going to be able to roam around free and ready to attack new people without any worries, unless sheís the killer and this is just a plot to get her next victim! That is a possibility, but I know either way this has a really bad feel about it and Iím going to be sitting here anxiously waiting for the next attack on the mudblood. Maybe this was why they were a lot stricter in the CoS because they had learnt their lesson last time?

Woo go Lily! I wanted her to have her own little action scene because I thought considering the letter was sent to her that she would so sneaking out is a great alternative to this! I am surprised that Remus and Peter didnít hurry after the other two out of curiosity even if they werenít worried because I didnít think they would want to miss out on all the other fun!

Hmm, some of Snapeís reactions were a little odd so Iím going to keep my eye on him. Maybe he was being threatened with a bottle of shampoo and had to go through with it? (Paraphrasing some HP character there :P, probably Sirius I think!) .

AH! You left us on an ending like that? Thatís just mean, Iím dying trying to figure what Remus figured out. Does him thinking mudblood four times have any significance? Probably, maybe, who knows except you! Gah I am waiting anxiously here so Iím hoping the chapterís posted first thing on Wednesday morning :P

-Kiana

Author's Response: I think the Marauders would make lovely detectives too! Which, of course, led me to write them in a mystery story, not to mention I love writing the Marauders in general. ♥ Also, let me just say that it's essentially canon in my own mind that Remus is scared of Lily, and it's actually something I've wanted to work in a story for ages. :P

I think in CoS -- and again here -- Dumbledore and McGonagall far overestimated the safety of the school. I know that if I'd had a basilisk roaming around my school, those students would have been out of there before they could blink, but I suppose that's what comes of someone who worries over things as much as I do.

There was actually an important sort of clue towards the end of that chapter, involving Snape and Remus -- if you read back through the chapter, I'll bet you can guess what he figured out, too! Or you could just read chapter 4, because it's posted now, but you don't have to do either. :D I will tell you that Snape is definitely a suspect, and keeping your eye on him is probably a good idea...

Kiana, your reviews. I cannot. ♥ You always leave me the sweetest comments, and I cannot thank you enough for them!


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