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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there!

I'm actually quite glad you won the challenge (and yes, I realize it was me who judged the entries) because I have read several of your stories and have loved each and every one of them! And I am going through a bit of a Jily phase at the moment, so I'm definitely looking forward to reading more of this!

There was a LOT I loved about this chapter. I think my favourite thing was that you managed to link it both to Snape's memories and also to the little canon bits and pieces that we know, such as the fact that the Potter's had a cat and that Sirius escapes from the dementors on Buckbeak the hippogriff.

I also loved the way you portrayed James and Lily in this chapter. In many fanfictions you get a James who is an idiotic prankster all the time and actually gets quite annoying, and a Lily who is so bossy and uptight that she's unlikeable. Then you get the James's that don't have a sense of humour at all and the Lily's that are far too nice - wow, I sound really picky, don't I? Anyway, I think your James and Lily have just the right balance! They seemed very believable in this chapter and made it much more enjoyable to read.

I also liked that you included more minor canon characters such as Dorcas and Mary - I know they are in the next chapter, so I'm wondering now whether or not we will found out more about them?

Great chapter!


Author's Response: oh wow, thank you so much! ♥

Yes, I do love linking tiny bits to canon. It makes me happy and usually everyone picks it up, so it's always good. :)

No, I completely understand. I'm so picky the James and Lily's to be written well and when they aren't I'm just so disappointed! I'm glad to hear that mine are very believable! :'D

Dorcas and Mary pop up occasionally but this fic is purely meant for James and Lily. :p If I'd been writing a novel, I would have put more information about them. :p

Anyway, thank you so much for the lovely review and the first place! ♥

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