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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Here for the B VS. B Ravenclaw Review Battle! (Go Team Blue!)
Wow, Kiana. I really loved this story, it was amazing. :) I have no words, but I'll try to get some thoughts down in the box.

Okay, I liked your use of second person narration. We don't often see it around but you managed to pull it off really well, so big kudos to you there, :) It just made Barty a lot more relatable and we got to know him more in this story than we would have if you used third person.

I loved how you portrayed Barty as just a boy who wanted to be loved, it was so heartbreaking as he gave his father chances again and again and kept up hope until the end. It was really realistic, how he joined Voldemort and how Voldemort made him feel included and wanted, even trusted. I think it's a really believable reason why he would turn to Voldemort and rebel against his father.

I particularly liked the scene where he pleads with his father to spare him. That's the breaking point, the last moment where, maybe, he could have been saved if his father had only made the other decision. Although at that part I thought the wife was pleading with her husband, instead of an onlooker? Correct me if I'm wrong, this is just from my memory. :/

Anyway, all in all, this was an amazing little one-shot which I loved reading. :D

Author's Response: Woo go Team Blue :D Ahaha I think I may have died of happiness with that third sentence, it made my day :D

I'm really glad that you liked it, because I had never written in it before now but it somehow felt right to use it. I thought it was really fun to try out and I really recommend it to everyone!

I'm so glad that you liked my portrayal of Barty, as he was such a fun character to explore. I know I felt really bad for him and it made me dislike Barty snr. even more than before because that made him join the DEs and Voldemort along with it.

I'm so glad that you liked that scene because that and the one before it gave me so much grief and I was really worried about. I'm not entirely sure about that either, so I'll go and have a check through it in here and the book to make sure!

I'm so glad that you loved it as it means so much to me and thank you for the amazing compliments! ♥

-Kiana


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