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Review:ShadowRose says:
Hi Jami, I'm back again!

So much fluff, it makes me so happy. :)

I really liked getting to know Mia and Aidan more in this chapter. I love seeing the way that Mia behaves around her son, because it's very different from how she behaved with Oliver, and it really just shows how much she loves him. I like the whole "bargaining" thing she does with Aidan, because, in working with kids, I know that that's often the only way to get any sort of response!

The part you included about Aidan struggling to combine both the Muggle world he goes to school in and the wizarding world. It's definitely a difficult topic to explain to a little kid, especially when children have this tendency to want to tell everyone about everything, and don't understand where to stop, so having her explain this to Aidan is a great scene. I feel like that's such an important part of raising a magical child, but it's so often glossed over, that it made me really happy to see it here.

I love how you've built on Oliver's character from what we know from the books. He's still very into his Quidditch, but now that we're in his perspective we see that he really cares about the players, not just the win. I really loved the part where he talks about training them so he doesn't have to lose any of them, because that is a huge factor in professional sports, and the fact that he cares for his players that much speaks volumes about his character.

This was a really brilliant chapter, characterization-wise. I like that you've sort of introduced both Mia and Oliver in their own separate worlds before you start to combine them - it's a great way to get to know each of their characters!

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this, and I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for new chapters!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Hi Taylor!! Thank you so much for returning for the second chapter!

I'm so excited that you're liking what you see of Mia and Aidan so far! I've really wanted to write about a single mother for some time. I guess working with kids is bound to translate into my writing eventually :P. And single mom's often has a really special sort of devotion, and I'm just so excited you're enjoying them so far ♥

I hate glossing over things. I think it's why my chapters end of being so long usually, haha. And showing that it isn't all fun and games to be a magical child in a muggle world is important to me, so I'm really thrilled you picked up on that and enjoyed it!

Aww thank you so much Taylor for all your amazing compliments. I've read this review way too many times (actually I just read it last night again trying to get inspired for chapter 3) and it gives me warm feels each time I read it ♥

Thanks for an awesome exchange!


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