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Review:patronus_charm says:
Happy Ravenclaw review tag! I was going to check out chapter two of The Society, but I really love reading entries for EWC so I couldn’t resist!

I have to say I thought the title of this piece was really fitting. I’ve always been curious by this love triangle as you can write from so many different angles and your title shows another one and it fits really well. It’s so true that it continues to haunt him for the rest of Snape’s life and we see it on his dying days. Then the subtle repetition of ‘shattered’ and ‘infinity’ throughout was really great.

This line was really great – ‘His infinity had ended, shattered on the concrete of a cruel mistake.’ it had really wonderful imagery and I love how you almost made the fault of Snape becoming a Death Eater lie down to Lily. In that section it almost feels that way and I’ve never seen it written like that before so it was really great.

You handled the evolution of Snape’s character really well, which is saying something for such a complex character! I think the one aspect of his characterisation I really liked was that you didn’t make him sob helplessly over Lily and that he almost ignored her for a few years, because it was an interesting twist and I much preferred it.

Then the ending was really heart-breaking. He had to only realise then that he really did love her, and though it may go slightly against canon, I thought it was great. The last line you left us on was really poignant and it reminded us that he never really got over that incident of calling her a mudblood and it left me with a lot to think about.

Overall, I thought that was a really great one-shot ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your lovely review!! :)

I really love stories written for EWC, too. They're short, and yet, they can mean SO much.

I actually built this story around the last line, which just popped into my head one night. The last line talks of irreparable damage, and so, while Snape had found a good thing in Lily, he ruined it all with one little word. She was everything that he had, the only person he valued, and once he alienated her, he had nothing.

In a way, Snape became a Death Eater because of Lily AND because of himself. He was the one who said the dirty word, and he was already doing some pretty dark deeds. And then, once Lily refused to forgive him (and who can really blame her?), he sought to fill the void in his soul with darkness. I'm so glad that you found it interesting to see it from this point of view! I'm not sure exactly how many stories there are about this event, so I wanted to give it my own little twist. :)

Thank you so, so much for your wonderful review!


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