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Review:AlexFan says:
First person narrating usually irritates me to know end because I just find the writing choppy but you've managed to pull it off quite successfully. You barely notice that its written in first person.

I liked the easy banter between Rose and her friends, nothing seemed forced or awkward and they seem to have a nice dynamic going on. You're right the chapter was on the short side but despite that you've still developed some of the characters personalities.

It was mostly dialogue based which isn't a bad thing but I do think that you could've added just a tad more description to the chapter.

Besides that this definitely sounds like an interesting start and personally I want to keep reading to find out what happens. Feel free to re-request but I'll most likely beat you to it!

I thought this was a pretty good start!

Author's Response: Hi again :)
I actually chose first person because I thought that it would be a good way to exactly get into someone's head. I was, however, concerned about it. I'm happy you think I've managed well enough :)

The other chapters are longer... And I have many more characters to introduce, so let's see how that goes! I will keep in mind that I need to be more descriptive!

Thank you so much for the lovely review :)
I will re-request!


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