|Review:||house elf says:|
Bah, this was tense!
The storyline was so interesting; I've definitely never read an Albus/criminal OC on this site before! ;)
I do feel quite sorry for Ash, though (great name, by the way :D). I mean, she didn't choose the thug life, the thug life chose her! ...haha what sorry /notfunny
Okay so, her first kiss was practically a corpse? Bleurgh! Poor girl! That line kind of made me shiver :/
So sad the way things had to go. Wasn't expecting that. Although I guess if I was in Ash's position, I would've had a mental breakdown and gone coocoo, escaped to start a new life deep in Alaska, or killed myself a long long time ago.
Ash had such a horrible life, and a disgusting father. And Albus left heartbroken and, I imagine, incredibly, dreadfully confused. :-( I wonder who else would be genuinely upset to see her go, though?
Anyway, well done on this! Very very different and well-written!
Author's Response: AAH I'M SO, SO SORRY FOR SUCH A LATE RESPONSE! :(
Anyway, thanks so much! :) It's true, the thug life did choose Ash (thanks again). She didn't ask for it.
Yup, practically a corpse. Sometimes i'm really shocked with what the brain can come up with.
I still get told that it should have ended differently, and I keep saying I may edit it one day, but honestly, I think I'll just let the dead lie (pun unintended). And the only reason she didn't run off or kill herself was, I dunno, a musplaced sense of loyalty to her father and a feeling that she couldn't ever escape her demons.
Albus, sigh, part of the reason I don't wanna change it is because i'm not sure how it'd end for him. And you're right- not anyone remembers Ash, other than him.
So, that was sufficiently ramble-y. Thanks so much again, and much love.