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Review:KiwiOliver says:
KiwiOliver with your RR: (Sorry it's late, been away a couple of days)
First off, this chapter made me really sad! You did a really good job of portraying Peters emotions, and although what he's doing is terrible, you managed to make me feel sorry for him!
I like how you cut back to when Peter was caught, and when he became thew secret keeper, instead of doing it chronologically. I think that really makes the chapter awesome because we already know he's selling out, now we find out how it came to happen.
The way this story flows is great, I just sat back on my bed and read the whole thing without being able to take my eyes away!
You asked me to find anything that needs mentioning, the only bit I don't like is very minor:
As Peter is thrown out by Voldemort and the death eater, Voldemort disapparates without learning the information Peter had given. Surely if it was important enough information not to kill Peter on the spot, he'd want to hear it?
That's the only bit of CC I could give you, because I liked every single other word!
You've done an amazing job and I really liked your writing style :)
KO

Author's Response: Haha, I'm actually glad you felt sorry for Peter! It's so easy to just hate him because he's such a slimeball, but I saw him as not really malicious, just weak.

I'm glad you think the non-chronological narration worked, too!

Thanks for pointing that out about Voldemort. I didn't include the specific information he handed over because I felt it took away from the plot - but you're right, it would make sense for Voldemort to stick around and hear it from Gibbon at least!

Thanks for your review!


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