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Review:Lady Asphodel says:
Hey dear, I'm here from the "Review the Above" from the common room. :)

You don't know how long it's been since I've actually read a canon (besides the AU) fic. It's quite refreshing to read. :) Thanks for this.

This was also really well written from the beginning. But towards the ending... it seemed rushed. No offense or anything. There's barely any description... and I couldn't help but feel... a bit confused... I had to reread sometimes to grasp what happened... but I still feel like I haven't understood what went on. :(

I do acknowledge that you said it was your very earliest stories, so I can understand... sort of being a newbie from the start.

But all I really gotta say is be careful of going into action scenes. And in my opinion... I don't think Voldemort would have simply have been destroyed by the fire spell... and that quickly... I could understand if you had went into depth... of perhaps Harry getting powerful... and what not... or go into detail of how different Harry & Ginny was from the last time Ron and Hermione had seen them so it would give more significance to the story/plot. Kick me if I had comprehended incorrectly.

Anyways, it was still a nice read. I just think this should have been a novella/novel more than a one-shot.

But keep on writing though. ^_^ Never get discouraged.

- Asphodel

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I enjoy writing in canon, especially the points that aren't seen in the books per se.

If I remember correctly, this was the second story I had written. I had deleted it with this year's April Fool's joke that I completely fell for. I revised it and put it back up.

I'm in the middle of revising this story to add in more descriptions and to include more of what happened.

You make a good point that Ron and Hermione should notice the differences in Harry and Ginny and I've added that note into the chapter. Thank you!

I'll see if I'm able to make it into a multi-chapter story, which does seem very likely.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

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