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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! Thank you so much for the shout out, and sorry this review is so belated! Just a heads up, I suck and deleted my thread again, but please PM when with AoC when you update again!

Which better be a whole hell of a lot sooner than this update, missy! ;)

This chapter was definitely full of fluff, but I don't think it was cheesy at all. I had to read the last to get my bearings, but I think you followed it up perfectly!

I LOVED the subtle way you showed us they would be. Obviously something happens to destroy them, or they wouldn't be the founders. I'm hoping it's something out of their control though so i don't have to watch them hurt one another :( I'm drawing a blank, but I'm nearly certain she hasn't told him her true heritage. Has she?!

Anyway, I loved how you showed that they have the ability to bring one another's best out. She can help him change his viewpoints and understand that people are just people, and he can help her strengthen that backbone that seems to pop out every so often in her ;).

Writing style! I loved it, but I did feel like it wasn't quite as... appropriate for the era as it usually is. A few parts like:

I am sure you could find a way to jog my memory, though, if you put your mind to it, I went on, shifting my arms comfortably around his neck. He laughed and leaned down toward me, the last of his tension sliding away.

Seem like they can be founders era upped a bit. Like:

"I'm confident you can find a way to bring the recollections back to me, if you desire it."

Sorry, I suck at that style, haha. The writing was still lovely, but it did seem like you were just a little bit out of your usual voice.

This chapter gave me all sort of warm fuzzies, and I really enjoyed seeing them together. I especially loved that you kept them who they are, but softened some of the corners to show them molding together. It's so cute! And no, I didn't find any parts cheesy!

Awesome chapter, lovely, and I look forward to getting a PM with AoC *very soon!*


Author's Response: Jami! I am SO psyched you came! Don't worry about being late, but I will say I've been looking forward to this review :)

I really, really loved writing this one. It was just so good to have everyone getting along and happy with each other. And not to mention the Helgazar fluff :) I'm glad you liked the glimpses into their best moments; I really wanted to show what they were capable of doing for each other.

You're right, she has not told him about her heritage, but the reveal is pretty imminent. And I've got chapter 9 WRITTEN already! I just have to go through and edit, but this will be a super fast update by my standards :P

It's almost kind of good to hear you confirm my suspicions about the style. I was reading through this chapter and I went, "Hm. This is...different." But I was so eager to post! It had been such a long time! But this is one that I'll definitely want to update, so it can match the feel of the rest of the story.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter, Jami! It means so much to me that you came by. And I'll definitely be letting you know when I update next! Thank you again :)


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