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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi my lovely! I'm so excited that you started a new story!

Draco during HBP is such an interesting/terrible time for him, and I'm really excited to see how you portray him during it!

There was an absolute sense of dread through this, which I really loved. The feeling Draco seemed to have even before Narcissa came in, that everything was NOT okay, really started us off on the right note.

I always wondered if he even realized hose serious this world was, or fathomed even, before wanting so willingly to join it. I think this shows a bit of him finally understanding what this life is, and realizing protection and safety are as far as you can get from the truth in this situation.

Narcissa seemed like she was trying so hard not to just break apart in this! I can't imagine being a mother in that situation. Well, this IS why we don't get involved with Voldemort, missy!

You have a few comma splices. Like here:

I had been sitting in my bedroom only a few minutes before, I didnít leave much anymore --

Those are both independent clauses, so you can either change the comma to a semicolon or reword the sentence to say:

I had been sitting in my bedroom only a few minutes before, which wasn't surprising considering I didn't leave much anymore.

But the comma splices were really the only errors I spotted. If you read it aloud you'll notice the rest super easily :)!

I loved that Bellatrix wanted to stay but would never defy voldemort by doing so if he didn't want her to. So Bellatrixy!

I really liked this first chapter, m'dear! And I'm so excited to read the next ♥

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