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Review:PitchBlue says:
Aaah finally! I was so excited to read this :D
As I already said, I love how you wrote Lotte. I kind of hope she'll make other appearances throughout the story (or sequel?), because I just like her so much. Some of the small comments how you described her said a lot about her character. For example: "The Netherlands native looked down her slightly upward flicked nose and leaned towards Marianne in support." I really loved that sentence. How she can be slightly arrogant but still seeks support.

Seriously, this chapter was so brilliant. I was completely hooked from the first line, how you described the settings and the general aristocratic atmosphere. And the small comment about how Marianne would rather be with the bohemian intellectuals was great! We also get to see that new, sneering side of her in more detail. I like how you've given her character so much depth, and how she has evolved during the story. Gaaah just brilliant. I love background chapters so I'll forgive you for not including Remus in this one :D It can't be all about the boys, right? By the way, did I mention what a great couple they'd be? Very original when you compare it to other Remus/OC stories. He almost always gets the shy, quiet, nervous girl. So this must be a nice change for him! :D

- Laura

Author's Response: Hurray! I'm so happy you like Lotte, since you helped create her! I tried to take your notes and turn them into a "real" person/character, so it's good to hear that things were successful on my end! For instance, you told me to make her slightly arrogant and pureblooded (if that's a word), so that's where that sentence came from ;) And I like her a lot (haha, a Lotte :D) too, which is why I told you she will probably show up in the sequel. I haven't plotted too far after Wide Awake but I can tell you that Marianne is going to need some good friends around her after the last chapter of this fic! She has a big decision to make!

I've said this in other reviews before, but my original plan for Wide Awake only included the Marauders' POVs. But then when I really started to get detailed, I was like, wait. Wait a second. Things are going to need to be explained a little bit more. For instance, you would hate Marianne if you didn't know where she came from or why she decided to slap Remus. The same goes for Gemma because her dreams allow me to make the plot so much more interesting/crafty!

And yes, Marianne and Remus are not your typical Remus/OC couple, but that was very intentional. Snape's worst memory influenced my version of Remus a lot - if he was able to joke about his illness (One: he's sitting on my chair. Two: he's wearing my clothes. Three: his name's Remus Lupin) then he had to have had (Jesus, is that correct grammar?) a good sense of humor. And since I love him to pieces, I thought he should have a sophisticated lady friend - almost like the movie Atonement!

Thank you for your long review and although I'm dreading Aeryn's chapter, I should be done writing it next week!

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