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Review:Female_Warrior says:
Hey, just dropping in to say that I really like what you've done with this story so far.

Regulus is one of those minor characters who doesn't really have a whole lot of background laid out in canon, and there's so much you can do to write him creatively! He's definitely one of my favorite characters, and I love that you're developing him and telling of the marauders era from his point of view. His relationship with Lily is such a lovely thing as well. It's believable, and Regulus's compassion for her definitely puts some distance between him and the whole pureblood-supremacy set of ideals. It makes him seem more reasonable and human than, say, Evan Rosier, and also superior in his quiet little way. :)

I adored your take on how one joins the order. Alastor Moody's whole character just makes him the perfect drill sergeant. The line a few chapters back about him telling Emmeline Vance to make some of the potions deadly, but not knowing if she listened, made me laugh. You can't be sure whether Moody is serious or just trying to scare the recruits, and I think he'd like it that way. ;) The tasks you put the potential Order members through test all the right things, bravery (I thought the Boggarts were a nice touch) and practical skills alike.

Also, I loved watching Remus gain a little bit of confidence in this chapter. He definitely has confidence in his own sphere, when it comes to his studies and the like, but I enjoyed reading his success in something that was more in the area of James and Sirius's talents. I'll be anxious to know now whether his doubts about joining the Order go away now, or if they persist. I was a little bit surprised at first by how apprehensive he was, but I suppose that would fit with his status as "the cautious one."

Anyway, this is a great story, and I'm glad to have stumbled across it. I'll be on the lookout for the next chapter!

Cheers,

Female_Warrior

Author's Response: Thank you! Nice to hear from you! :)

It did disappoint me a little that we didn't hear more about Regulus even in the little slivers of information we got about Sirius and his friends in canon. I also think he's super interesting, and when this weird idea about him and Lily being "friends" came to me I found it too difficult to resist. I also love exploring the idea of him and Severus forming a friendship since they both have in common that they lost their faith in Voldemort in time.

It's so great that you like Moody and the assortment of tasks I devised for the Order. I really don't like writing action sequences and this process of the trials has put me through my paces. Moody is a lot of fun and I do hope that I've captured his raw personality well.

Yeah, I think Remus probably doubts himself more than he should. He's certainly braver than Peter and there's more to him than simple book smarts, like with Hermione. I would think that facing the trials would make a lot of people feel nervous, but what counts is that he pushed ahead, and I'm glad you liked that he was proud of himself at the end.

Thanks again for your fabulous review :)

-Amanda


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