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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
Wow!
The second chapter actually clarifies a lot of things. It's really interesting to see the backstory and motivations behind Astoria's quiet rebellion.

You asked in your RR to name any characters I'd like to see included in this- it's a bit premature, but I'd love to see Narcissa in it. From her actions in DH, she seems to have similar 'family before voldemort' values to Astoria. Also, i'd love to see Bellatrix, as she's exactly the opposite.

In my last review, I was a bit confused about the setting, but this chapter has cleared it up. Am I right in thinking that this is during DH? As in Draco is seventeen, and Harry is off chasing Horcruxes?

Again, great attention to spelling and grammar. I only noticed 'trey' instead of 'tray'.

Lavinia's past is just so COOL!!! She's like a dark feminist or something- fighting for woman's rights by being a Death Eater BAMF or some such nonsense my brain just came up with XD.

Astoria continues to be a really interesting, thought-inducing character - I can't wait to see more character development for Draco!

Well written- don't worry about the back-story jumps, they seam together beautifully!

~Gilly

Author's Response: You are *exactly* right about when it's taking place. In fact, it’s during Easter Holidays, a few days before Harry, Ron, and Hermione get caught and taken to Malfoy Manor--that’s why Astoria isn’t at Hogwarts. I'm trying to slip that in somewhere. I didn't want to put it in the initial timestamp, because I was worried that people would associate ‘Easter Break, 1988’ with the Malfoy Manor scene from DH, and would get confused.

How interesting that you would choose those particular characters. Based on the re-drafting I’ve been doing today...*rubs hands together, cackles*...very interesting. It is great to know--extremely helpful. Thank you!

I’ll have to fix that ‘trey’ thing. Good catch!

And I am *so* glad to see Lavinia get some love. Sad she had to turn to the Dark Side and all--but let that be a lesson. We ladies, we get our rights...or we turn *evil*

...as all the other girls look around, wide-eyed, mouthing ‘Speak for yourself, crazy’ ; )

Thank you so much. Your review was very helpful, and gave me a good idea of what I ought to focus on in the chapters I am currently working on. I really appreciate it!


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