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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
Wonderful!
I love a good mystery, and Draco/Astoria is a ship I've really started to love (or, if not ship, Draco/Astoria interaction).

You don't give out too much information in this chapter, which is perfect for mystery, but I would like to know a little more about your universe.

It's hard to tell from the chapter what has happened- it seems like Voldemort is still at large from the way you're talking about Death Eaters, but I could be wrong. I know it's supposed to be mysterious, but maybe a little more establishment of your setting might help keep the readers engaged.

I love the characterization so far! I'm really intrigued by both Draco and Astoria- I love how perceptive Astoria is, and how good she is at reading people. From a first person narrative point of view, it's always nice for the reader to see the world through intelligent eyes.

As for Draco, I've always been interested in his character - I think he's a very complex person, and so far you have definitely done him justice.

Your grammar and spelling is impeccable as far as I can tell, so thank you for paying attention to that!

This is a very good opening chapter- I liked the short prologue, as it helps to establish Astoria's character quite a bit.

I can't wait to read more!
~Gilly

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing, and so promptly! Yes, it is a bit unspecific, isn't it? I was hoping that the year would give it away, but perhaps I was too vague--I certainly would not have the specific years memorized if I did not need to for the timeline of this story! Perhaps there is a way I can better allude to that in this first chapter. I'll think on it.

I am so glad that you noticed and enjoyed Astoria's perceptiveness. That has been tricky to get right, because I am a fairly oblivious person--I never notice details in day to day life. But if one were the daughter of a spy, I figured that they would be a great deal more observant. So I am delighted that came through!

Thank you again for taking the time to review! I really appreciate your thoughts :D


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