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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Amanda!

Even though this chapter was shorter than usual I think it was more fitting, and it meant a quicker update so no complaints from me on that front. It sort of reflected how Helenaís time is coming to an end and it made me have lots of feels. I was on tenterhooks throughout this chapter so I dread what Iím going to be like in the next!

I thought Rowenaís characterisation in this chapter is the best that Iíve seen her at throughout the whole novel. You caught her pain and fear so well I almost wanted started to cry due to the state she was in. It really is tragic to see that the great founder of Hogwarts has now become this.

This chapter had so many moments when I wanted to shout at all of them and tell them to stop what they were doing thought it was primarily focused towards Rowena speaking to Venn. Itís strange how when she finally accepts him as her daughterís fiancť it results in her daughter dying. I thought that entire scene between them was written really well.

I liked getting more of an insight into Helenaís reasoning for running away, because though there were signs it was still really sudden so it was nice to see that. I liked how you kept up that Helena is an independent woman and thatís why sheís doing it.

I canít really write anything coherent at the moment as Iím just so sdjbeig (that really is how Iím feeling!) over Rowena making Venn go and save Rowena when he ends up killing her and then ending with the rustling, so Iím going to cut this review short. That has so many possibilities and Iím holding on with my little finger so Iím hoping the next chapter is up soon! Youíre even making me worried about what happens to Eostre!

I really did love this chapter though ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello, thanks for christening my new chapter!

Yup, we are coming to the end of the story! The final chapter is going to be a little different, so I hope you like it and are satisfied with my choices in terms of how things wind up there.

WOW, thank you!! :) I relied a lot on canon for this part, because we know that Rowena called the Baron in to help her find Helena because she believed that he wouldn't give up and would search endlessly for his true love. I also tried to play up the imagery to show just how much she's suffered and deteriorated as a result of her ongoing conflict with Helena. Even the physical symptoms of her illness resulted from running out in the rain to try to convince Edeline to cancel the wedding.

Yeah, it's sad to think that things might have been okay if not for the fatal exchange to come. On the one hand, the hopes of various characters in this chapter seem way too good to be true, and on the other I want to let them have those final moments because the truth turns out to be so much bleaker. I'm glad you felt like they had a good interaction because they obviously haven't been on good terms for most of the story up until this point.

I wanted to emphasize that Helena's decision to run away is childish, not because she isn't under incredible pressure and needed to escape somehow but because she didn't think through a better way to deal with her circumstances. Although it would be frowned upon for a girl to try to get out of her engagement in this time, she still could have gone to her mother and father or Helga and at least tried to talk to someone with more power than she has. She doesn't even know what she's going to do after skipping the wedding--go back home? Keep running? She's independent, but it's to a fault in my mind.

Keep holding on--the last chapter is coming soon :) Thanks again, Kiana!

-Amanda


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