KiwiOliver here with you're review :)
Since it's a long-ish chapter, I'll review as I go, then sum up at the end :) Hope that's okay!
I'm intrigued as to why she wants to burn the photographs, because so far this first one seem's quite nice.
I do think they talk like they're a lot older then they are, but I suppose Hugo comes from a well respected family so that could be to do with that.
The part about McGonagall's stern expression made me chuckle, I can imagine that happening :p
Anslee seems like a realistic character, she's normal, not over the top in anyway, I like that.
I like the fact at this point (Second photo) Hugo seems like a fun joker type of person :) He seems like a likable character.
The way you've changed her feelings after each picture brings back a new memory is done really well, because our feelings are the same as hers, as an observer.
Aww It's cute how she's falling for him, you've written that in a nice way, not a stereotypical gushy romance way. I like it a lot :)
AW! That was perfect, Hugo's proposal (to date not get married) is amazing, really great idea :)
I've taken up a lot of this review already so I'll finish it when I finish the chapter (I'm that into it).
Okay. Overall review time:
The flow was brilliant in this story. You managed to warp me through every possible emotion and in a single chapter make me go from chucking to feeling llike I've lost something.
You managed to write brilliantly both ends of the spectrum, which is a big talent because depressing scenes are quite hard to write! (In my opinion)
You have a good character, you manage to make us feel for her, and with her throughout the chapter.
Even Hugo, though we see him through Anslee's eyes, has a strong character that stays constant.
You're plot was brilliant, the idea of going back to memories was a great way to get in a nice mix of heartbreak (Specifically, mine) and I found the whole thing very interesting. I was gripped from the start by the sad first paragraph, throughout all of the photo's I knew something was going to happen, you were able to keep me in suspense which takes a lot :p
My last few words are: A strong, well written story that would be hard to improve. (Hence the lack of CC)
Hope you liked the review as much as I liked reading this!
Author's Response: Hello there! Sorry for the delay in replying!
That little "burning the photographs" thing is one of my little foreshadowing things, I really do love those. :)
Hugo was a really fun character to write, and it was fun to make Anslee gradually fall for him. I was trying to avoid the overdone crazy passionate type love story, so I'm glad that you noticed that. And Hugo's proposal was so much fun - it was one of the first things that came to me when thinking up this story.
I'm glad that you thought the emotions changed well, because that was one of the hardest things about this story: going from the depressing scenes to the happy ones and vice versa.
I'm glad you liked my characterisation - both of them were fun to write, because they weren't the typical perfect character, but they had their own little quirks.
I'm so happy that you liked this - this review had me grinning from ear to ear! Thanks so much!