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Review:ValWitch21 says:
I am absolutely mortified by the time it took to get back to this. *wears hat of shame*

Right, so having commented previously on the socio-political background of this story, I've got to say that I loved the inclusion of newspaper clippings at the beginning. It was an amazing way to tie all the loose ends together, and the fact that you kept characterisation perfect makes them even better. Umbridge is such a horrid woman, and obviously we know the motivation behind her hate of the centaurs. Also, front-runner for the Wizengamot Elections? How could people be so stupid?!

Ah. And then we switch to the Dursleys, who, admittedly, deserve their closure as well.

What I adored about your Petunia is how very canon she is. She's intensely dislikeable, of course, putting everything magical into a bracket she refuses to reopen, but at the same time I found her almost endearing, in the sense that she's nothing but an ageing woman overwhelmed by things she cannot understand.

ACK THE FEELS. THE FEELS OF LILY'S MENTION. (And of course I mean Lily the First, not Lily Junior)

Thank God I'm not typing this review at four in the morning or I would be sobbing my eyes out.

Evans in the quizzical tilt of her head. Evans in the softness of her hair. Evans in her thin face. Evans in her bright glow, emanating throughout the picture and warmly melting all that it touched.
She looks like me, Petunia thought to herself. Like us.


This quote reduced me to blob of emotions. Then add the fact that the dog is named Moony and you've got yourself an unpresentable Val.

NO. You did worse. You wrote about Petunia saving a little share for Lily. WAH. I'm sorry for how incoherent this is turning out to be but you are repeatedly stabbing at my poor feels.

Ah and this final section is what makes this chapter so perfect. You see, you could have had an emotional Petunia suddenly feeling forgiving, but no, you balanced her out with selfishness and bitterness and everything else that makes your Petunia the same as JK's.

Overall, this was an amazing story and I'm really happy you offered me a chance to read it!

Author's Response: Hi! :) No worries at all about the delay, this awesome review more than makes the wait worthwhile!

I'm so pleased to hear you liked the conclusion of the story and the continuation of the other stories. Hopefully it managed to tie the fragments of the different chapters together! I know, Umbridge really is awful, and I thought it would contribute to the unfairness and corruption of the story if she managed to claw her way out of being punished and back into power.

I'm very pleased you thought Petunia was canon and well-written! :) I wanted to make her as dislikable and typical as possible, but with a small hint of redemption. I love your description of her as being overwhelmed, and it seems exactly right. In many ways, I see Petunia as being very immature and out of control.

Haha, aw I'm happy to hear this brought the emotions! Thank you for quoting that section to me, I'm so pleased you enjoyed that bit. :) And the "Lily's share," it was a bit of a spontaneous addition but it's lovely that it was appreciated!

Really, Petunia fitting with JK's is such a wonderful compliment. I didn't think it likely that she would completely change from the selfish, horrible woman she is to Harry, and honestly she might be boring to write if she was. I'm so pleased you liked her. :)

Thank you for another wonderful review, and being so kind and supportive about this story! I loved reading your reviews and really appreciate how thoughtful they were! :D


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