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Review:MargaretLane says:
At the start of the chapter, Rose says "you willing agreed". It should probably be "willingly".

*grins at her not having 1st years in the library very often* That makes sense as they would probably only be studying very basic magic and would have all the info in their textbooks.

"Daily Prophet" should have a capital "D" and "P" as it's a title and should also probably be in italics or underlined.

You've written "way to hard" when it should be "way too hard".

*laughs at the thought of Albus giving James a Babbling Beverage* Love your references to various potions.

*laughs at the books attacking them*

I'm with Rose here. NO such thing as too many books.

*cracks up at even Al not thinking David brilliant* I sort of think he's going to turn out to be smarter than they think though. I could imagine him being like the Weasley twins or having flashes of brilliance that are obscured by his totally inability to take things seriously.

The research they're doing in this chapter and the way nobody except Rose actually wants to reminds me of when Albus and Rose were looking for names of students whose parents or other family members might have been at school with Harry, Ron and Hermione.

Author's Response: Since I love potions, I had a great time coming up with a love the different potions and what they do.

I loved writing about them getting attacked by books. I love torturing my characters. Unfortunately, I don't get to torture them very often in this book, but I can't wait for the later ones where I get to torture Albus endlessly.

David is a very interesting character. The part you usually see is when he is joking around. But there is another, hidden part to him as well. You won't see this in full force until the second book though.

But you are right, he can be smart when he wants to.

It is so funny about all the coincidences our Albus's have. I usually don't even notice them until you point them out!

Thanks for reviewing, and pointing out the mistakes I made!



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