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Review:peppersweet says:
Hi! I'm here from review tag :)

Intriguing opening! I wondered, at first, if this was going to be a story about the Peverell brothers, but I changed my mind about three paragraphs in - the parallels are obvious, though, with the first brother being brave, the second cunning, the third quiet and unassuming. I wonder, is their father Godric Gryffindor? Just the clues about the strength, the courage, and being one of the four heads of Hogwarts...

I wonder, is there actually a relation between the Peverells and Gryffindor's sons? I simply wonder this because Harry and James were both Gryffindors, and descendants of Ignotus Peverell.

'She would learn of love. The kind of love that settles over the heart as silently as morning fog, and cradles it like a tender hand. Once such a love takes hold, there is no forgetting it. - this line was really nice! It's a lovely piece of imagery :3

I quite like the fairytale-ish aspect of this opening chapter, although, if I could offer a piece of concrit, I'm not sure it's the most exciting opening you could have. I like the opening sentence of 'this is a tale of three brothers', but, even though the chapter is brief, the fact that it's all descriptive makes it seem a bit passive. I don't know what I'd suggest to change this, because this is, as I said, kind of fairytale-like, and does suit the genre! I feel like you maybe gave a little too much away by describing each of the brothers and then the unnamed girl - you've already mentioned that the girl befriends the youngest brother, and then learns 'of love', which is a bit of a giveaway for the plot. I think that, maybe, cutting down this chapter a bit and making it slightly more vague before diving into the action would leave us with a lot more questions. Gah, I didn't explain that well at all! Honestly, this is a very good prologue, but that's just something that stuck out to me in reading.

Great start! ♥

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for this lovely review! I posted this prologue ages ago and then just kind of put the story away. So it's great to get some more good feedback on it!

I have had so many reviewers point out similarities between my OCs and characters in the series. I never notice until someone mentions it! Haha I suppose that's something I need to work on. Although, if I ever do continue this, the characters should distinguish themselves from the Peverells. (And by the way, you're right about them being Gryffindor's sons.)

Another thing I tend to do a lot is give the game away in the first chapter. For this, though, I think I'm okay with it. Like you said, it's sort of fairy tale-like, and I like the inevitable feel to those stories. I like knowing what I'm in for, in a way. So I thought I'd go for that sort of thing in this prologue. Thanks for the suggestions though! It's definitely something I'll need to keep in mind for future stories :)

This review made my day! Thanks so much for coming by...I really appreciate your thoughts :)

--Maggie


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