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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
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I really really liked this :) I envy anyone who can write in first person, so first off well done for that!

I think you captured Percy really well in this. I liked that even though he acknowledged the fact that he'd been an idiot by choosing work over his family, it still took a lot of thought to get him to make the right decision in the end and leave his precious ministry. It's exactly how I imagine he would have come to his senses and join the war.

The part with Aberforth in the pub was a really nice touch to this and I liked that he kept his promise to keep Percy informed, even in the midst of the war.

This was really well written, I didn't spot any spelling or grammar issues. The only thing I would have liked to see is Percy telling Thicknese that he was quitting his job, like he told Fred he did :) Other than that it was great!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for coming by to review!

I love writing in first person...in fact, I have trouble writing any other way! I'm really glad you liked the narration. I wanted to show my imagining of how Percy would have gotten to the point of joining the war effort, since it wasn't really explored in the books.

Now that you mention it, the part about Thicknesse would have been super funny to add! I might have to start thinking about another oneshot soon :). Thanks again for the wonderful review!

--Maggie


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