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Review:academica says:
Hi, here from Review Tag!

Wow, this was incredible! I don't really know where to start. Well, firstly, your characterization of Peter was just perfect. I loved how you threaded his feelings of conflict throughout the piece; for example, the line about how he had always wanted power but suddenly wished he hadn't been trusted with the Fidelius Charm was really powerful. You can also see his courage eroding as he decays into the person that we find it hard to believe was ever sorted into Gryffindor. I also loved the imagery with his eyes--that line "Peter blinked" was so simple and yet so, so effective. Same goes for the literal blood on his hands at the end. It was perfect.

It was nice for you to pull in elements from canon, like the quick betrayal of the Potters and the suspicions raised about Remus, and I thought your build-up of how Peter may have switched sides was also very believable. You can see, sadly, that he's setting himself up for a lot of regret in his later years. I can also see foreshadowing about why he might have chosen to hide as a rat with the Weasleys for years following the Potters' deaths. Clearly he was using it to his advantage here.

This story just has so many layers and I feel like it's a very special gem because there are so few Peter-centric stories out there as it is. This one definitely deserves a place in Story Recommendations, so I'm off to drop it there now.

Great work :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I have the hugest smile on my face now after reading this review, you just made my day!

I really appreciate your comments about the imagery - that was one of the things I worked on the most for this piece. And I'm glad you thought the circumstances of his betrayal seemed real. I felt that he couldn't possibly have just turned on his friends only because he found someone more powerful to attach to. It seemed like the action of someone who was already broken.

This may sound odd, but you noticed something I didn't even realise about my own work - I hadn't even thought about the foreshadowing of him hiding with the Weasleys. But now that you mention it, I do see it. Thanks for pointing that out!

Story Recommendations?! :O I'm so honoured. Thank you!!!


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