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Review:marauderfan says:
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This is a really original idea for a story. I don't think there are a lot out there from the POV of Dominique, so that's cool. And I've never seen Dom/Teddy before, it's a nice twist but still believable.

As for the plot - you certainly pack in the suspense in this first chapter! You descriptions are very vivid as well. The whole chapter has a buildup of fear and dread until that moment at the end when she gets bitten. I think you've got a wonderful start here. Poor Dom, I have a feeling things aren't going to go well for her for a while. You've done well with her characterisation though - I can already tell she seems like a very determined person - although she doesn't consider herself brave, she does risk a lot for her job. The paragraph where she realises this, and all the things she's risking for the sake of a good story flashes before her eyes, I think really sets the scene for the rest of the story. (I assume, having not read the rest of the story yet haha)

I also like your portrayal of werewolves. They're very nice to her, and concerned for her safety - it's sweet. And that only makes it even more sad when one bites her. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next, and seeing the experiences of a newly turned werewolf from her point of view.

Nice job on this!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you think my idea is original. More on Dom/Teddy comes in the later chapters.

Haha I am pleased to hear you liked the suspense, if it can be called that. I was worried I overdid the descriptions but thanks. I am happy you like Dom's characterisation so far. It does set the scene for the story yeah!

Its good to hear you like my portrayal of werewolves. I didn't want to show that they are bad or something even though my story revolves around her being bitten. I am pleased you enjoyed this, and hope to see you back for the rest of the chapters.

Thanks!


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