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Review:marauderfan says:
I really liked reading from Terry's POV! This was a really cool change. And it was nice to see the cameos from Harry, Ron and Hermione in Charms. Padma Patil was great too - we never get to see what she's like in the books apart from when she was ditched by Ron, but I like how you've made her just as gossipy as her twin! ;)

How scary for those three first-years. I'm glad Tor finally intervened though - even if it took someone almost dying for her to stand up to her friends.

So I guess Avery found out, huh? I guess Tor and Terry's secret is still relatively safe because Avery is leaving Hogwarts, but the secret's not going to last long.

A couple of things I thought you might want to look at again - Flitwick sort of takes a stab at Neville in Charms class, which seemed a bit OOC for him - that's more something Snape would do. I think Flitwick was a lot nicer to Neville. Also, you mentioned Zacharias Smith being in class with them, but I thought he was a year younger? (But I honestly can't remember and I don't have my books with me, so maybe I'm wrong on that.)

This was a great chapter! I can't believe I'm all caught up with this story now, and I hope you update soon!!!

Author's Response: Hola! I'm happy you liked Terry, I loved writing it and getting to know him a little better. It figures that Harry etc. would interact more with Terry, since they're friends and in the same year, so it seemed like a good opportunity to put in some core canon characters. I like Padma as well, and you're right, there was a lot of free reign but I wanted to have a more light-hearted female character since Tor and her companions are pretty intense.

I know, the poor first years! At least they were okay, however. And yes, Demetria's involvement, the incident with the Slytherins and their reactions will be better explained in the next chapter, since we're only really seeing Terry's perspective here.

Hmm, that's a good point about Flitwick, I don't think he would take a jab at Neville either though he might be a bit wary without realizing it. I might fix it so it seems like Terry's the one thinking that, however! And I'm not sure about Smith, I don't have the books here either but didn't want to throw in another OC, maybe I'll make Justin the one with the failed Charm. :P

I'm so pleased you're caught up now! Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon, I'm working on it so there shouldn't be too long to wait. Thank you for reading and supporting this story, it's very encouraging for me and much appreciated! :)

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