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Review:academica says:
Hi Val!

First off, this is a cool concept for a story--I wonder if Eloise is going to have her fairytale ending after all with Cormac. I also liked how you went into her history and charted the course of her experience with being bullied and trying to figure herself out.

The insults you came up with were really creative, though I hate to say it! It was interesting to watch her bloom as she conquered her acne, and I also liked how you showed the ways in which magic helped her (like when it caused her parents to celebrate with her in Hogsmeade) and hurt her (such as the unfortunate incident in the Hospital Wing).

I think this could have been folded into part of a first chapter, given its brevity, but I can see why you might have wanted to set it aside as a separate prologue sort of chapter. Either way, I'll bet this makes for the start of a well-written story.

Great job, and thanks for the swap :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda!

Well, I'm not going to say anything about the fairytale ending, because that would make me a bad secret-keeper. (I REALLY WANT TO TELL YOU THOUGH.)

As someone with my teenage years not so far away, the whole 'trying to figure yourself out' process was something essential to include. I don't actually know why I'm using past tense, I'm still stuck in the phase. Anyway.

I'm ashamed to say that I laughed when coming up with those, so don't worry! Acne is probably the worst thing about adolescence (you know, along with greasy hair, oily skin, unrepressed angst, teenage drama, and all the other lovely things included in the package), and this may sound a bit corny but I think once you do manage to get rid of it, it really helps your self-esteem.

Thank you so much for reviewing!


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