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Review:academica says:
Hey! Thanks for the swap :)

I picked this one because I really loved your piece on psychosis, Look at Me, and this story did not disappoint. Eating disorders can be hard to understand, but I thought you did a nice job of capturing a number of salient aspects. I especially liked Mary's internal battle with herself and her disordered thoughts in terms of when she should eat and when she feels regret about having eaten. You can tell that no matter what choice she makes she ends up hating herself for something or another. It's really quite sad to think about, especially given that she had friends like Lily who would have undoubtedly accepted her as she was.

I also really liked some of the stylistic choices you made here, like the counting and breathing routine and the derogatory terms that kept creeping into Mary's mind. It was a nice tactic to get the readers into her mind and help them understand how obsessive and dark her thinking patterns became.

Nice work! I'd love to see you write more in this vein, because you do a really great job with it.

-Amanda

Author's Response: You're welcome!

After reading your review I actually went to pay Look at Me a visit and its really quite strange how stylistic I had made it comparing to my other pieces, and even this one.

It's a bit surprising how much I miss writing these kinds of stories even though they require a lot of work and care and going over constantly. And I think I would like to go back to this and perhaps doing a longer work that focuses on the human mind specifically.

This was inspired by a myriad of things so I'm glad you liked it and I'm glad you think that it worked so well considering I've not experienced a lot of the things I write about and I research it all for the stories.

I think that a lot of mental disease all have select things in common and its the tumult of mixed feelings about other people and themselves and how they're perceived. They know something is wrong but the don't always acknowledge it properly and that's what happened with Fred and Mary here. They couldn't bring themselves to understand what exactly was going on - if they even knew what it was going on with them.

Thank you for such a lovely review, you gave me lots to think about and lots of ideas sparking up! :D

Hannah ♥


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