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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there! I keep seeing this story mentioned on the forums and I saw you pop up on review tag so I decided to check it out! I also believe this is the story’s 750th review so congrats for that!

I liked the air of mystery you made Brienne have. Normally I’m not so keen on school transfer stories but due to the air of mystery Brienne had it made it a lot more enjoyable to read. It also intrigued me as to why she left Beauxbatons and ended up in Hogwarts as it does seem rather odd but I feel as if this has a good explanation behind it.

Luna’s characterisation was really good. She’s quite a hard character to capture as she’s so quirky and odd and no one really knows what’s going on in her head, but I felt that you caught her mannerisms and dialogue really well. I liked how Brienne didn’t judge Luna straight away and it will be interesting to see whether these two end up being friends or not.

The dementors scene was well written and it was interesting to see it from another person’s perspective. In fact, it will be interesting to see the entire story written from another person’s perspective as it makes you look at the entire series in a different way. I liked the female train person’s accent, as it made it more authentic because I rarely hear one person speak the same in Britain.

The only CC I would really give is in this line ‘But then -- just as the girls seemed to fall into a comfortable companionship -- the train slowed to a dramatic stop,’ the ‘—‘ proved to be quite distracting and I didn’t really see the purpose of them as the sentence would still make sense without them, so omitting them might be better :)

Overall I thought that was a really good start ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you very much for your review :)

I wanted to write a student-transfer story because I thought it would be a good idea to blow away low expectations for such a cliche, and also to tell a story about Hogwarts from an outsiders' point of view :)

I'm so glad you liked Luna! She was so fun to write, but sadly she doesn't appear again xD

Thanks for pointing out that line :) I really want it to flow well so thanks for letting me know about it.

Thank you very much for your lovely review!


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