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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! I keep meaning to get back here, and I saw your name floating around and went OH.

I loved the appointment, especially the nervousness of it all. I can't see that being exactly exciting as much as terrifying, but you combined both emotions in there and I really enjoy that.

Albus flipping through the magazine without even realizing what he's reading was the perfect way to set up an appointment. How many times have we all done that waiting? Everything boring and you just want to be on with it! I really enjoy watching the scenes from his PoV... he has a childlike but being forced to grown up sort of quality that is really endearing.

The small detail about Astoria and Draco donating the money was one I really loved. I've always struggled with where exactly they would give birth, and have had to build a little head canon for Marauders era. Now I'm always going to imagine next Gen St. Mungo's as having it's own ward thanks to Draco and Astoria :P!

Ugh I just got a phone call that I had to take. Okay, I hope this doesn't seem too hectic now that I've lost my place and am trying to get back into it.

OH! I LOVE Louis getting a nice little talking to. Though now I can't help but sort of ship him and the Healer. HAHA. They're cute!

To be honest, I forgot how easy your writing was to slip into. You have such a clean style of writing with first person. This is a PoV I struggle so much with, so that makes me even more jealous :P! Picking this story up again was like never leaving, and your characters are created so well that I didn't have to try and remember who they were or anything.

Oops. There goes my phone again. Okay, let me try and wrap this up as quickly as possible.

Love that you ended it with the morning sickness, because everyone that doesn't want it always gets it. Also, I would add a bit more explanations during the appointment. Taking any sort of medication, even prescriptions, always has risks while pregnant. The healer going over those (mayoclinic is a good website to find solid facts) would have added even more realism, but if you don't want to do any edits I don't think it's necessary.

Awesome chapter, sorry again if this review is all over the place! But I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Hey, Jami! I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to answer your review.

Yes, there is some excitement, the planning and stuff - but they have gotten to the big stuff yet, so we'll allow them their excitement. I think nerves override it, though. I'm glad you like it. :)

Yes, my own appointments have totally been inspiration for this. I'd be doing the exact same thing as Albus, as I imagine most people would. :P

Haha, Draco and Astoria, or Astoria with Draco's blessing and money, have come through for Next-Gen pregnancies. :P Feel free to have it. :)

Louis and Annie? Hmm... Tell you a secret? *whispers* They were a definite contenders for a pairing. You'll have to reds to know if they made it. ;)

Aww, thank you. I love writing in first person present. I have to keep checking when I try first person past. I'm always jealous of people who write that way.

Morning sickness, yes. Lexi definitely jinxed it by saying she didn't want it. I couldn't leave it out. :P

Thank you so much for leaving a review, Jami!

Sam.


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