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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there! Happy review exchange! Haha!

There were a lot of difficult prompts in the gryffie challenge and I'm so impressed with your ability to include them in the story still make sense and not seeming like it was built to for the criteria.

Gellert stories are so few and far between that I gobble up any chance I can get to read them. I loved the fact that this related strictly to Gellert's own feelings and wasn't revolving around his feelings for Albus. It was a sad look into someone who apparently had no feeling toward his actions at the time, but a realistic one.

Tying in his later years, when the penguin finally is able to disappear after Gellert's guilt was able to creep up with him, was also a really nice touch!

I think it would have been fun to maybe tie the penguin more into Ariana. Like Gellert's realization it is identical to a charm she had or something. I get that it's sort of just a creature right now that's embodying her traits and making Gellert bring forward some amount of guilt even if he doesn't recognize it, but connecting it even more with Ariana might be nice ;).

I really loved the detail about him knowing he killed her. It almost sounded like he did it in purpose, and I like that so much more than one of Albus's curses being the reason.

Awesome job on this first chapter, m'dear!

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you very much!

Out of all the choices, I picked the penguin first. :) But it was an interesting story to write.

I'll work on revising the chapter to link the penguin with Ariana better.

I really like taking the missing moments from the books, expanding them and linking them back into the book. :)

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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