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Review:CambAngst says:
Review Tagging you back!

Alright, some Draco/Astoria wub! I am so deep in that mindset right now. This couldn't have come at a better time.

I really loved the progression you took Draco through in this story. Beginning with the arrogance and self-importance he feels after receiving his mark and his orders from Voldemort, proceeding through the awful experience at the top of the Astronomy Tower and then descending into the horrors of the Second Wizarding War. You did a great job of capturing the essence of a young man who was forced to grow up fast under terrible circumstances.

I really liked the way you described Lucius, Bella and Narcissa. Again, I thought your characterization of the three of them was perfect in light of what we know about the three of them by the time we see them in Deathly Hallows. Snape was another interesting addition. Even though we know better, I think that what you described was exactly what Draco would have seen.

And then it was all over, and he seems rather adrift. I don't think he's feeling survivor's guilt, but he's definitely suffering from survivor's something. He's not sure whether he'll ever be whole again after the things that he's seen and done. It was a fantastic characterization of someone who's been through something so traumatic.

And lastly, we see Astoria. I like the way that you idealized her in his eyes. I'm sure she has flaws like any other person, but Draco doesn't see that. He sees her at first as an unattainable goal. An image of the type of perfection that he's too tarnished to approach, too tarnished to deserve. So in the end, she comes to him. And she helps him find his way. She changes his song. That was a beautiful sentiment.

Just so this doesn't come off like one long, gushy love-fest, I saw what I think was a typo that I'll point out:

She liked her coffee bitter, always choosing the strongest blend. - Based on the sentences that follow, I think you meant to say, "He liked his coffee..."

This story really got my day off to a great start! I almost forgot to mention that I really liked the way you made it look on the page. Normally, I'm not such a huge fan of stories where every sentence is set out in its own line, but I think it worked brilliantly for this. Honestly, I don't know a thing about Dr. Who, but I don't think that matters. I really love what you did with the quote for this story. Great job!

Author's Response: Hello! *waves*

*gushes* Aww! I'm so happy right now! This has made my night (timezones are weird, am I right?)!

I think you're on the mark about Draco's characterisation in this. Concerning Snape in particular, you're right in saying that this is exactly what Draco would've perceived, because he just never saw the other side of it.

And it's definitely survivor's something! He doesn't regret the surviving part, but it's almost like... he knows he survived in body, but he's mourning the loss of his spirit.

You're spot on with Astoria as well. She is the embodiment of perfection for him. She's everything he'll never have because of what he's lost. And Astoria is like an angel of sorts. Let's hope that as their relationship progresses, things become a little more normal and less surreal for these two!

I don't mind long gushy love fests! And I haven't decided yet if that was a typo or not. It can be read either way, I guess, which is kinda cool, at least to me!

Thanks again for such a wonderful review! :DDD


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