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Review:BookDinosaur says:
-BookDinosaur- here and all that jazz. :P

I quite enjoyed reading this chapter, but I have to admit I got a bit confused with the trick Margaret played on Merissa. I mean, you've mentioned Margaret once before, but that was only at the Sorting, and while Merissa did say how she looked immature, I don't see how she's suddenly the Big Bad Wolf, if you know what I mean. I would reccomend you to put in an encounter with Margaret first, before she plays the prank, because I felt that this nastiness is completely unexpected and coming out of nowhere. But if you mean this to be some sort of mystery that needs solving, then by all means ignore this. :) But I still do want a bit of buildup to this nastiness.

I love the mystery of the wand-it seems like you're going to add an antagonist and their plans in the lot, am I right? Haha, I can't wait.

I love how you have the wizarding and Muggle societies clash, especially with the little ankle episode-I can completely see why she's so uncomfortable showing her ankle, but I can also see how ridiculous the wizards and witches would have viewed this rule as. :) I think that was a really nice touch, along with the female Charms teacher, it just served to show how different their societies and habits were.

I think your characterisation of Merissa is going really well. I love how she asks a lot of questions, because it's very realistic thsat she won't know anything about the Wizarding world, and I love that she wants to find out. But I'm worried for her, she has to balance her two lives out, and eventually she'll have to pick one, won't she? Gah, I'm worried for her.

Great job on the story so far, I'm really enjoying it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I wrote out a response this morning and apparently forgot to select the proper button. :(

I've added notes to previous chapters to include more interactions between Margaret and Merissa. Margaret isn't necessarily bad, it's more like she wants to be friends so much that everything happens wrong, though there is also a particular person with a particular ring...

Ultimately, yes, Merissa is going to have to reconcile which world she will live in. But that is several years down the road... And yet, this story holds the roots of her choice.

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!


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