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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
Hey, here I am for the first chapter of our swap!

Jennifer seems like an easy to relate to character so far. While many stories have employed a female character who serves as sort of a "fifth marauder," usually that character is a Mary Sue who is bff's with Lily and is the only one who can tame the wild player Sirius, but Jennifer is definitely more well rounded than that. I also enjoyed that her interactions with Lily were a pretty realistic level of drama, there was some conflict, but it wasn't over the top or anything. But I fear I can't get too attached to Jennifer knowing that she can't be around when Harry is born.

Sirius's segment was pretty enjoyable as well. I think you captured the attitudes of 11 year old Sirius pretty well. You could tell he came from an aristocratic family, and he wasn't a full fledged rebel yet, but maybe the seeds were there.

I'm looking forward to Remus and Peter's entrance!

Author's Response: I'm glad that Jennifer seems very realistic. When I started this novel, one of my goals was to make the characterization realistic because the main character of my first novel seemed to me sort of like a Mary-Sue.

Sirius is always a fascinating character for me to write because whilst he is my favourite character as well, he is still so complicated!

Remus and Peter's entrance will, unfortunately, take a bit longer because I had wanted to focus on the girls before I get into the Marauders more in depth before Fifth Year.

Thank you so much for the lovely review! (:


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