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Review:academica says:
Hi Jami! Back to read some more for the exchange!

You did such a great job with Mia's characterization as a mother. I've spent a lot of time working with kids this summer and I've noticed two big themes: you've got to be willing to bargain with them, and you have to entertain a lot of prying questions. I loved how gracefully Mia handled Aidan because it showed that she's perfectly resilient and capable even though she's raising him mostly on her own. The bond they shared was really palpable as well. I can already tell that poor Mia has some baggage and it will take her a while to feel like she can trust Oliver, especially with Aidan as part of the deal.

I really like Oliver as a coach, too. You get the sense from the series that there are many different kinds of Quidditch coaches, some good and some not so good. Oliver doesn't go easy on them, but he genuinely wants to reward them and celebrate with them when they try their hardest (and even more so when it pays off and they do well). I think that sense of balance is great and it definitely rings true with how I think of Oliver from canon, so really wonderful job there.

This was a nice chapter just to set up some characterization. It's good that you're not rushing into the pairing right away--not that I'd expect you to, given your skill with storytelling. It'll be interesting to visit again sometime and see how goes the course of Oliver and Mia's courtship.

Thanks so much for doing the exchange with me! I had a lot of fun and I hope you did as well! (And thanks again for both of your lovely reviews!)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Amanda! Hiii!

I'm so happy you liked Mia's characterization. Yes, I'd agree completely with those two themes. Sadly, those are both things that so many parents struggle to understand! I think that's why I've made Mia so attuned to Aidan and given them *just* each other -- single moms are usually the ones who understand their children as people and not just mini dictators.

Spending so much time with kids sometimes has its downfalls, like I want to pull my hair out by the roots then strangle myself with it, but at the same time it's fun getting to understand the little creatures :P.

Making Aidan part of the deal has been the most fun for me, and I hope will end up challenging what Oliver thought he previously wanted.

I have SUCH a hard time trying to figure out HP Oliver, and am sort of just going on head canon, so I'm really excited that you think he fits your canon as well! haha! Did that make sense? :P

I always am afraid people are going to get bored with the more characterization driven chapters, so I'm really happy that you didn't seem to! And your compliments have really put a smile on my face. It's so much fun for me to know that you've been there reviewing and, hopefully seeing improvement, from the start!

Thank YOU for the awesome exchange! Your opinion is one that I really take seriously, so knowing you think these first two chapters were done well is such a relief ♥


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