|Review:||800 words of heaven says:|
Okay, so I was casually browsing the forums, and then I saw that you had popped up in review tag, and I thought to myself, "Man, it's been a while since I read Escaping the Storm! Perhaps I shall go revisit the story!" And then I clicked on your author page link, and this is the first story I saw, and I was like, "Ooh! Pretty banner!" So then I read the summary, and I was like "I think I'm in love with this story already!" To be clear, at this point, I haven't even clicked on your first chapter yet.
So the first paragraph is an amazing place to be, descriptive writing wise. "Artillery fire", "hive of activity", and "spectrums of colours", are I think my three favourite phrases in this paragraph. They work so wonderfully because for me, they're not just visual imagery, but also incorporate other senses. "Artillery fire", and "hive of activity", were like bursts of sound in my imagination's ear, and 'spectrums of colours' was like a physical touch - because, I'm weird about colours that way.
One paragraph into our introduction to her, and I feel like I know Rose Weasley on a deep level. Her ambitions as a journalist, and the reasons behind it, struck a chord with me, and already, I feel like I can relate to her. It's as if her past drives the shape of her future, which I think is something a lot of people can relate to.
It's wonderful the way you've included what some of the Weasleys are up to, whilst also giving more dimension to Rose's ambition. I think it's really important that you establish the parameters of your world, and you've done a really clever job here by making it serve a sort of dual purpose.
I see a lot of similarities between Rose's character and Percy's. You haven't mentioned Percy so far, but since she seems really close to Molly, was Percy an influence on her?
Yay! The Egypt I was promised in the summary! I'm seriously looking forward to her assignment there, and all the shenanigans that she'll get up to! And personally, I think an international assignment like this would be awesome for her. I think it's a bit weird of me to be thinking of Rose's character so intensely already, but I feel a real connection with her and this story - something I haven't felt in a really long time in fanfic! So please don't be freaked out by the way I shall be obsessing over this story!
I do have a question at this point. Is the story more focused on romance, or mystery? Or is the romance and mystery so intertwined that they're kind of plot features for each other? I was just wondering - I love this story so much already, so I'll be sticking around either way.
I'd really love to go on and read and review the next two chapters you have, but I'm a bit strapped for time at the moment. However, I shall return - soon!
Author's Response: Wow, waking up to this review definitely brightened my day! I loved the story about how you ended up here as it made me laugh :P I know the banner is very, very pretty so I'm glad that managed to attract you in!
I'm really glad that you liked the description because you may remember from the earlier chapters of EtS it was descriptionless but I realised how much fun it is, and now I throw it in everywhere!
I'm so glad that you feel as if you know Rose, as that was my main aim with this chapter. I thought it was bit too introductory but if you're saying that then there's no problem! Hopefully, by the end of it she'll be more content, while not entirely by my plans but contenter :P
I'm glad that you liked the bit about the Weasleys as they are her driving force for her determination as she feels she needs to be better and more sucessful than me, but when really she doesn't as they'll love her either way.
I haven't really thought about that aspect actually! I suppose in a way he would be as he's an 'outcast Weasley' like she feels she is so they're going to be closer than the other Weasleys.
Of course it appeared, I would never break my promise :P Don't worry about feeling a connection with her I think it's really great that you do because I know when that happens to me it's a pretty awesome feeling! I'm not freaking out, so don't worry!
Erm, it's probably going to be intertwined. I can't really say more because a. it will probably change throughout the course of writing like most things so that's fairly neutral. b. if I explain the reasoning to why it may change it would give too much away!
Thank you for this amazing review and I can't wait to hear what you think of the next two. Don't worry about time, I know what life can get like! ♥