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Review:patronus_charm says:
I spotted this on the recently added list and Iím so glad I decided to read it! I really love Dramione stories and I loved the Divergent series so I have a good feeling about this one!

The reasoning behind Hogwarts having to get factions was really good and I thought your characterisation of McGonagall and Dumbledore in that scene was brilliant. The way McGonagall got weepy over the loss of quidditch was brilliant. I was surprised that she didnít demand to be the head of the Dauntless house as thatís the closest to Gryffindor there is.

Dumbledore was brilliant too! I always found him really hard to write so I have to say the way you included all his little quirks and nuances was amazing. The little cameo from Snape was really good too. I almost wish the teachers had to choose a faction too, as it would be interesting to see what they all went for.

I liked the initial idea of them all going to join Amity. It made sense for them to want to stick together though I couldnít help but think why on earth are the Golden Trio going to the peace loving faction. Then with that big reveal scene from Harry ditching Ron to go and be selfless was really great and almost selfish of him as he left Ron :P

I like the idea of Hermione joining Dauntless too. It gives her a reason to spilt up with Ron without him being made to be all evil and angry, it means she can get close to Draco and she can be with Ginny so she hasnít lost all of her former self. Iím really excited to see how this mixes with the wizarding events.

One thing I would recommend is perhaps getting a banner from The Dark Arts as that would help people notice how awesome this story is! This was a fantastic start and I canít wait for chapter 2!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Ohmygoodness, you just made my night! I put in a request to TDA as soon as my chapter was validated and just got a reply today, so fingers crossed!
Anyways, I was afraid my characterizations wouldn't match up with the original characters that we all know and love - especially since I wrote this at about 2 am! - but your review put my fears to rest so thank you so much! I was going to have them all decide to go to the ones they chose (Ron-amity, Harry-abnegation, and Hermione-dauntless), but then I figured that it wouldn't be how they would do it. It's just after the war, so I figured they would want the easiest one, especially the one representing what they fought for (peace, duuh!) but then I just sat down to imagine how it would go and my imagination ran wild and Ron went with the original plan (as I was sure he would) and Harry's reasoning would be how Dumbledore always commended him on his selflessness, so of course he'd choose Abnegation! Then Hermione... that's the biggest twist that I wanted! Her choosing Dauntless BECAUSE of Malfoy xD
Thank you for your review and I'm sorry my reply was super long! It was wonderful seeing the perspective of my first chapter through a reader's eyes!
Love,
Welchie!


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