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Review:Jchrissy says:
Goodness, Amanda. Between Diamonds into Coal growing on the darker side of things and the Ginny chapter before this, I'm pretty confident you're just trying to break my poor little heart.

I wanted to comment on something you said about starting a Ginny centric story. In terms of her characterization in the first chapter of this, I think you have an awesome handle on it. Especially with the fact that you're aware of how much more she does need built up for her. JKR just didn't give us enough to really have us attached to her from the books. I'd be really curious to read that when you start it!

Now on to this actual chapter.

YOU ARE MAKING ME SAD. It's amazing how much these young people gave up for their friends. They never had to be so involved with helping Harry, and he probably wouldn't have even resented them for it. But here they are, sleeping in the freezing cold because they care so much about him and each other.

I love that Hermione is having these flickers of, 'why me,' sort of. She deserves it. She keeps them together. She's necessary for their survival, and she loves them both. But that doesn't mean she has to go happily into it all. I rarely see an author explore the times when her thoughts would have been darker, so I'm really excited that you did.

What barely adult wouldn't think, for just a moment, that they didn't deserve to be dealing with all this? But we never really see Hermione getting to feel that way, so I was very (pleasantly) surprised when you focused on that for this chapter.

As with Ginny, I do think you have an awesome handle on her character and am excited to see more of her in your future story! I also really loved when she was thinking about how her and Ron had grown closer. It was a nice moment of warmth and just reminded me how much I love these two.

Another amazing chapter! ♥

Oh, and seriously -- as awesome of a compliment it is that you want to get back to BTF... please don't feel like you have to take the time to review everything. IF you do decide you want to get back to it, I would feel so much better knowing you aren't spending hours review and just enjoying until you run into a chapter that you have suggestions for/for some reason is one you want to review.

Author's Response: I'm glad you're excited about it! Hopefully it will work out and you do stop by and check it out.

I agree that it seems like Hermione gets brushed over as this totally resilient and logical character, and while her strength is admirable and befitting of a true Gryffindor, I wanted to focus in this chapter on her vulnerability and the fact that she's still a young girl out in a world where she could be captured and killed at the drop of a hat. I could really see her questioning herself in these quiet moments, especially knowing that Harry and Ron depend so heavily upon her.

I'm happy you liked the Ron/Hermione fluff, too. There are a lot of dark themes here but I wanted to highlight the simplicity of taking comfort in being with the person you love.

Thanks so much for this kind review, Jami :)


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