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Review:patronus_charm says:
Bethany! I was really excited when I saw the chapter title as I had a feeling that Daphne was hiding something and the big reveal scene to it was really wonderful :D

I really liked the childhood scenes as you wrote them really well and they warmed my heart. I think it was the way Daphne pitied Pansy at first which was really shocking as I didnít expect that at all. Then the part about the train and the sorting hat was really nice too as it balanced out their friendship and put them on equal ground which is different to how it ended.

The sense of fear and worry you created throughout the battle of Hogwarts was really brilliant. It reminded me of people during WWII being in an air raid shelter waiting to see if there house had been bombed or not. I really liked this line in it ĎI remember the five of us hovering like spectres in that cold kitchení it had wonderful imagery ♥

The way you described the names of the deceased being read out was really cold and sparse in language which worked really well for the setting and their emotions. I liked how you put a lot of emphasis on their reactions to it as that really was the turning point for both of them. It made sense that Pansyís parents died as it helps me understand her actions in the present.

Then even though they were united for a little while with their little pranking, I could almost tell that they were going to take drastically different parts. My heart warmed when I heard about how Daphneís life improving and I didnít even know what happened to her as a result of giving Pansy the key so the fall out was even worse in that respect.

I honestly had no clue that Daphne had been to Azkaban and you kept that really well hidden. I really pitied her in that bit as you described her pain really well and the thing which got to me was Theoís shame in her as it made me want to know how they ended up being friends and I was really happy when I found out how :D

I liked the descriptions of Azkaban and it was nice how you tied it into the reforms that Hermione had been making. The idea of the counsellor was really good and I liked all the descriptions you went into for Niamh as it really added to her. Overall, I really thought this chapter was brilliant and I loved learning more about her past, Iím eagerly awaiting the next now :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: I feel very bad for a mammoth amount of time I've let elapse before responding to this review. It's turned out to be a pretty busy month, and I've been away a lot, but I'm finally here to say thank you to you for leaving me another totally awesome review!

I did enjoy writing all that childhood politics stuff. Daphne and Pansy have such a fraught relationship that was fun to explore.

I'm so glad that you liked the Battle of Hogwarts part of this (I was quite pleased with it!) That WWII comparison hadn't occurred to me, but I can totally see what you mean. I hadn't actually planned for Pansy's parents to die, but when I wrote that scene, it just seemed like the logical thing to have happened- it's good to hear that it works!

I tried to put in little hints about Daphne's Azkaban past, but clearly that sort of failed! Oh well, hopefully you enjoyed finding out anyway?! It actually made me sad to write Theo's shame in her, but I knew they were going to be okay in the end, so that was fine, haha.
I definitely think that Azkaban would have been different after the war... and that Hermione wouldn't have stood for things as they were! I like to think that wizards would have realised that people like Daphne need counsellors, not gaolers, and so Niamh was born! :P

I'm so, so glad that you enjoyed this chapter, as there's quite a lot of stuff in it, plus I know it's all presented kind of differently from the rest of the story! Thank you for this simply awesome review! (you do a good line in them :P) ♥

-Bethany


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